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Friday, 5 November 2021

A person in disguise

 A person in disguise


So there I was, sitting on the cold, hard gravel. I unravelled my sleeping bag and placed it on the sharp rocks.  I sat in my sleeping bag and stared up at the sky.  As I looked up at the stars, I saw the stars were aligned perfectly surrounding the moon.  My Nana always told me that when that happens it’s a signal that your Guardian Angel is watching you.   Nana never told me who mine was. 


I lay there staring at the cloudy, dark sky. 


Just like that I then opened my eyes to the sunbeams shining brightly on my face.  As I struggled to open my eyes, I saw a tall figure walking down the alleyway next to me, feeling his presence so close to me.  I watched the person walk past me and it was like I'd seen them before but I just couldn’t figure out from where. Tall, slender.  “Who might they be?” I mumbled to myself. I then continued to roll my sleeping bag back up.


I then continued to go along with my day. I walked to the park to find a strange note on the ground amongst the crunchy leaves.  I picked up the note and as I was reading it, the note slowly disappeared and turned into dust in my hands.  I brushed the dust off my hands and started walking to the nearby coffee shop. When I entered the coffee shop, the hot savory smell hit my face. I ordered my drink and decided to sit down next to this old man that was casually reading the newspaper.


“Hello!” I said. The man looked at me and smiled.


“Hello.  How are you?”.  “I’m good!  What about you?”.


The man's eyes lit up.  He then continued to say “Wow!  “Nobody ever asks me how I am anymore!  It’s never really concerning to anyone these days.”


“Well, It’s concerning to me”.  I smiled.


“Thank you.  “Yes, I’m great”.


The man smiled back at me and continued to look back down at his paper.  He looked intense reading all the latest current news.  


Eventually I stood up and collected my drink and walked outside to sit on the bench.  I sat there.  As I was looking at the ground beneath me, the exact same note swished under my feet. I then proceeded to see a shadow of a person walk past me.  It was the same figure that had walked past me earlier! I looked back down at the ground and the note was gone. I then swung out of my seat and followed the figure. It started to turn down an alleyway and just simply disappeared like the note into dust I had tried to pick up at the park.  I decided to walk down the alleyway.


My eyes began to blur, I shut my eyes since I couldn’t really see where I was going. I could hear footsteps behind me. I made the decision to open my eyes again.  All I could see was whirlpools of darkness.  My heart began to beat faster and faster.  I felt myself completely let go.  I was surrounded by total silence., quite deafening.  Then …..


Ummm Hello?  Oh yes.  Well nobody found out about what happened to the rest of the story.  It’s all a mystery.  Maybe it’s better if nobody finds out what the rest of the story holds ... a dream.  Perhaps with an unanswered ending for another night?  Or perhaps for another dream …. Maybe.  Who knows.


A narrative written by: Eden J


2 comments:

  1. Hi Eden
    What a high quality piece of writing you have produced this week ! I love the wide range of word choices you have used (verbs, precise verbs, adjectives) to paint a great picture in the readers head. Well done for trying to use a new line for a new speaker when using direct speech.
    Miss Hudson

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  2. Wow! You had me in suspense right until the end of your story. I loved how you used lots of descriptive words like describing the different scenes/environments you were in, your emotions and feelings. It made me feel I was right there with you. Fantastic story Eden.

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